WALT: use the i see method.
-State my opinion
-Explain what I mean
-Give an Example
Bikes are good cars are bad.
Cars use too much fuel which is polluting our earth.
Bikes give you exercise and don't cost a lot.
I have a bike that cost me $99.00, but my mum got a car last year for $6000 plus a $18.000 truck.
Cars pollute the earth.
Cars use oil and fuel which is polluting the earth and is causing global warming.
In order for cars to go they need Oil so in order for us to use oil in our cars we need to ship it from the United States to New Zealand,and when a fire starts on a oil ship it can explode and leak for days even months before we can stop it. Which means New Zealand may end up like the gulf of Mexico.
Cars cost too much.
For some New Zealanders it costs too much to register their cars do the warrant of fitness and more. Fuel is getting too costly and is bad for our Enviroment.
Nice use of the ISEE method to explain how cars pollute. Next time you could try writing all of your reasons like the second one. I completely agree with you Brittany that bikes are much better than cars, however for me I am very lazy and like my heaters in the morning.
ReplyDeleteWell done Brittany! Your use of the I SEE method looks like it really helped you with your writing. I like how you stated your message really clearly and gave some really good examples of why you should sell your car and buy a bike. Next time you could write a few more sentences on each paragraph.
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